Does this make sense grammatically? Need help. Thank you.

[j@cko]

Dear Vicki,

Hey, Vicki, how's it going? You are probably thinking why in the world would I write a letter to you? I have not had chance to congratulate for the acceptance from the University of Toronto. Therefore, I am writing this letter to congratulate you! Oh! I also want to thank you for giving me the ride to school somtimes, um... I mean almost every day.. Anyway, I'd better wrap this up. Wish you all the best and have an joyful summer.

Jack

 

[Bomberboy]

Sounds good to me.

 

[monto]

<< Dear Vicki,

Hey, Vicki, how's it going? You are probably thinking why in the world would I write a letter to you? I have not had chance to congratulate for the acceptance from the University of Toronto. Therefore, I am writing this letter to congratulate you! Oh! I also want to thank you for giving me the ride to school somtimes, um... I mean almost every day.. Anyway, I'd better wrap this up. Wish you all the best and have an joyful summer.

Jack >>



congratulate you...your acceptance instead of the... (too impersonal seems to me) giving me rides...have a joyful

 

[Doctorweir]

I have not had a chance to...

The rest seems to be ok, but however, I'm no native english speaker...

 

[ProviaFan]

...I have not had chance to congratulate for the acceptance from the University of Toronto. Therefore...

Shouldn't it be &quot;I have not had a chance to congratulate you for the acceptance...&quot;?

 

[Urinal Mint]

Here is a better rewording:

&quot;Dear Vicki,

I want in your pants. Every day on the way to school I wanted to make you my little love slave. Go to Toronto and fantasize about me nightly in your bed, and I shall die a happy man.

Jack&quot;

 

[monto]

<< Here is a better rewording:

&quot;Dear Vicki,

I want in your pants. Every day on the way to school I wanted to make you my little love slave. Go to Toronto and fantasize about me nightly in your bed, and I shall die a happy man.

Jack&quot; >>

/me like

 

[Don Vito Corleone]

OK, here is my (slightly reworded) version:

Hey, Vicki, how's it going? You are probably wondering why in the world I would write you a letter. I have not had a chance to congratulate you on your acceptance to the University of Toronto, so I wanted to drop you a line to congratulate you! Oh, I also wanted to thank you for giving me the ride to school somtimes, um . . . I mean almost every day! Anyway, I'd better wrap this up. I wish you all the best and I hope you have a joyful summer.

 

[tigerbait]

Don Vito's version sounds good. use that.

 

[j@cko]

Ya, thanks every one.

 

[j@cko]

Ya, thanks every one.

 

[webnewland]

I wish you all the best and I hope you have a joyful summer

Take out the second I? to make it

I wish you all the best and hope you have a joyful summer.

 

[AmazonRasta]

Dear Vicki,

Hey Vicki, how's it going? You are probably wondering why in the world I would write you a letter? I haven't had the chance to congratulate you on your acceptance to the University of Toronto. Therefor, I'm writing this letter to congratulate you! Oh, I also want to thank you for giving me a ride to school sometimes, um... I mean almost every day. Anyway, I'd better wrap this up. I wish you all the best and hope you have a joyful summer.

Jack





I think that's about as good as it gets.

 

[Sluggo]

Dear Vicki,

Hey, hows it going? You might be wondering why I am sending you this note. Until now I have not had a chance to congratulate you on your acceptance to University of Toronto. I was thrilled for you when I heard of your acceptance, and I am sure you are terribly excited about it as well.

And while I have your undivided attention, I would like to give you a sincere Thank You for all of the times,(OK every day) that you were able to give me a ride to school.

If I am not get lucky enough to see you before you head off to University, best of luck there, I know you will do great. Have a great Summer!

Hope to see you soon,
Jack

P.S. I heard Ivana Humpalot goes to school there, if you see her, send her my way