Critique my site(s) **UPDATE: new contact page-slick or sh1t?**

[slackerinabox]

Hey guys,
I haven't really worked on my site in a while.. I figure I'd start adding content after I hear what you guys have to say about the layout.. welp, here's the site:
Slacker In A Box

and

Here's a site I made for my niece - not really changing this but would love feedback as well... (check out the MORE PICTURES section- I'm pretty proud of how slick it looks)

 

[PraetorianGuards]

Nice layour Freedom! Start adding layout and I'm sure it will get better. I also like the second site, very colorful!

 

[freakflag]

Pretty good. I like it.

 

[slackerinabox]

Originally posted by: PraetorianGuards
Nice layour Freedom! Start adding layout and I'm sure it will get better. I also like the second site, very colorful!

Thanks!

 

[iamme]

ok, this is real minor, but the text that says "Time to break out the cheap tequila and snorkel gear!" under News is kinda small and might look better if it was the same font as the rest of the page. very minor....otherwise, i like websites designs that are simple.

nice!

 

[slackerinabox]

Originally posted by: iamme
ok, this is real minor, but the text that says "Time to break out the cheap tequila and snorkel gear!" under News is kinda small and might look better if it was the same font as the rest of the page. very minor....otherwise, i like websites designs that are simple.

nice!

Good call on that text - I'll up the font size a bit! Thanks for the helpful suggestion!

 

[slackerinabox]

double post.. sorry!

 

[slackerinabox]

Just added a CONTACT ME page - please let me know what you think!

 

[madthumbs]

When critiqueing I don't compliment. I just add my opinion of what I see could be better because there's no point in complimenting, but there is to tips on improving.

"Thank you very much
for visiting and please check
back often for updates."

-looks like fluff or a "begging for hits" plea, and occupies approx 1/3 of the useless text on the front page. Nothing on the first page makes me want to explore the rest of the site. The first page is like the first two minutes of meeting someone. It can make or break the relationship.

 

[JonTheBaller]

Have you tried reformatting?

 

[slackerinabox]

Originally posted by: madthumbs
When critiqueing I don't compliment. I just add my opinion of what I see could be better because there's no point in complimenting, but there is to tips on improving.

"Thank you very much
for visiting and please check
back often for updates."

-looks like fluff or a "begging for hits" plea, and occupies approx 1/3 of the useless text on the front page. Nothing on the first page makes me want to explore the rest of the site. The first page is like the first two minutes of meeting someone. It can make or break the relationship.

Good point.. That's really temporary filler text but still, you're right.. Will think of something else to put there...

 

[Ness]

Black and White really doesn't do much. You should add some color. Even if it's very very light pastels.


I love the logo of the guy in the box.

 

[slackerinabox]

Originally posted by: ness1469
Black and White really doesn't do much. You should add some color. Even if it's very very light pastels.


I love the logo of the guy in the box.

Hmm, I figured that the content (pics in the gallery, short film thumbnails, etc.) would be in color so that would result in some nice contrast...Is that good enough or should I add color to the layout itself?

I'm glad you like the logo - I had some inspiration when browsing a CD filled with public domain art (photoshop rocks!)

 

[nagger]

very nice and clean layouts

nice work

 

[slackerinabox]

Originally posted by: nagger
very nice and clean layouts

nice work

Thanks Any more comments? Could someone specifically comment on the CONTACT page?

 

[slackerinabox]

bump

 

[BennyD]

New Page 1?

 

[crisp82]

Very very scary contact page....good job!!!!!!

love the 'Dear Sam' thing...very...stalkerish

 

[slackerinabox]

Originally posted by: BennyD
New Page 1?

oopS! Fixed!

 

[crisp82]

You live in a box? For real? Where do you keep the veggies?

 

[slackerinabox]

Originally posted by: crisp82
You live in a box? For real? Where do you keep the veggies?

Well, I don't really LIVE in the box.. I just spend most of my time there.. It's not really that bad, actually.. I have a nice cooler filled with cheap wine and beef jerky.. Works out well..

 

[slackerinabox]

Final bump for the .. hour I really need some pointers so please, if you can spare a minute, check out the site.. Thanks!

 

[slackerinabox]

bump

 

[Budmantom]

Nice layout but like you said it needs content.

 

[crisp82]

I could usse the css script (if thats what it is) for my site....just the centre box thing anyway.