Critique my Resume...

Syringer

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Looks pretty good, very nice accomplishments there.

I would change this though:

"? Strengthened interpersonal skills by interacting with donors, peer group and management"

It's too late right now for me to figure out exactly what to change it to, and while it's a good listing, it's just..pushing it a bit. Maybe someone will disagree with me.

You also have an unnecessary period here "? Helped recruit 2 individuals for Sales Associate position."
 

ucdbiendog

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My comments:

What is it that you are looking for? an internship? a full time job? what kind of position?
Have you taken any classes that relate to what you are seeking?
The bullet about your computer skills is rather lengthy, consider revising.
Also, one thing I would consider doing is removing the formatting (lines across page, etc.). It's a good idea to be able to copy/paste your resume from word to notepad and not lose any formatting (good for putting it on search sites).

You do make good use of action words and seem to have good work experience, although that could depend on what kind of position you're seeking.
 

state 08

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Originally posted by: ucdbiendog
My comments:

What is it that you are looking for? an internship? a full time job? what kind of position?
Have you taken any classes that relate to what you are seeking?
The bullet about your computer skills is rather lengthy, consider revising.
Also, one thing I would consider doing is removing the formatting (lines across page, etc.). It's a good idea to be able to copy/paste your resume from word to notepad and not lose any formatting (good for putting it on search sites).

You do make good use of action words and seem to have good work experience, although that could depend on what kind of position you're seeking.

-seeking fulletime
-Resume expert told me to leave out relevant courses cuz he said it's not like you're taking irrelevant courses
-considered
-might keep this as my print out res, and then have a seperate res w/o lines

thanks for help!
 

dds14u

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Originally posted by: state 08

-seeking fulletime
-Resume expert told me to leave out relevant courses cuz he said it's not like you're taking irrelevant courses
-considered
-might keep this as my print out res, and then have a seperate res w/o lines

thanks for help!

I suggest removing a bullet from each of your "Experience" sections. It's quality that's important here. In fact too much quantity on the same topic will just get readers bored.

If you have extra room there is nothing wrong with putting in some information about what you learned in particularly important courses.

And the MOST important part of your resume is missing...your objective. This is how you cater your resume to each of the companies you're interested in. If you show that you've done a little research on the company, it will make you stand out.
 

imported_elwood

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Where's the bullets? You should create an objective and list your skills right after it on top according to all the the guides i've read. You should try posting it on monster.com forums, there's a lot of experts on there that will give you excellent advice.
 

Pugnax

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I'd disagree with the objective line. I guess it's a matter of preference. Some people (even I did it at one point) cook up these grand objectives, but what's the point. When I look at a resume for a job, I know the erson's objective: to get this job. It's unnecessary. Unless you have extra space, I wouldn't bother.
I don't see any hobbies/activities section either. Could just be one line. But if you put down something like bowling, golf, football, reading anandtech (might not be the best thing!), you could instantly gain some recognition from an interviewer. Sometimes they want to know more about a person than just his accomplishments.
Other than that, it looks good. Easy to ready and well organized (key!). I'd make the font color black if it isn't already (my monitor is bad here, hard to tell).
 

dds14u

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Originally posted by: Pugnax
I'd disagree with the objective line. I guess it's a matter of preference. Some people (even I did it at one point) cook up these grand objectives, but what's the point. When I look at a resume for a job, I know the erson's objective: to get this job. It's unnecessary. Unless you have extra space, I wouldn't bother.
I don't see any hobbies/activities section either. Could just be one line. But if you put down something like bowling, golf, football, reading anandtech (might not be the best thing!), you could instantly gain some recognition from an interviewer. Sometimes they want to know more about a person than just his accomplishments.
Other than that, it looks good. Easy to ready and well organized (key!). I'd make the font color black if it isn't already (my monitor is bad here, hard to tell).

Sometimes at a career fair there are multiple jobs in question, in which case it would indeed matter what he specified.
 

Gibson486

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Aug 9, 2000
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Originally posted by: Pugnax
I'd disagree with the objective line. I guess it's a matter of preference. Some people (even I did it at one point) cook up these grand objectives, but what's the point. When I look at a resume for a job, I know the erson's objective: to get this job. It's unnecessary. Unless you have extra space, I wouldn't bother.
I don't see any hobbies/activities section either. Could just be one line. But if you put down something like bowling, golf, football, reading anandtech (might not be the best thing!), you could instantly gain some recognition from an interviewer. Sometimes they want to know more about a person than just his accomplishments.
Other than that, it looks good. Easy to ready and well organized (key!). I'd make the font color black if it isn't already (my monitor is bad here, hard to tell).

depends who you ask....most people today say leave it off.