Critique my Resume

[FrequencyX]

I have had my resume for awhile now adding a little here and there. I am looking for a new job, and will be moving down to Salt Lake City area within the next few months.

Just wondering if you guys can look it over alittle and give me some constructive criticism.
http://www.savefile.com/files/2216368

Thanks

 

[Otaking]

Why Salt Lake City?

 

[FrequencyX]

Originally posted by: Otaking
Why Salt Lake City?

Family reasons and more oppurtunity than Montana for IT people. West Jordan area preferred.

 

[acemcmac]

there are free, and really good pdf distillers out there.. check the software forum

 

[tfinch2]

I see long paragraphs and I don't even want to read it.

 

[hypn0tik]

Originally posted by: tfinch2
I see long paragraphs and I don't even want to read it.

Agreed. I don't know if it's just me (I'm using OpenOffice) but you might want to format it a bit better. Bold important stuff, use bullets etc etc...

 

[razor2025]

Umm.. definitely needs better style. It looks completely bare to me.

 

[Rudee]

Terrible format. I couldn't read it and had to close it.

 

[mAdMaLuDaWg]

Categorize ur accomplishments and list them under your job titles instead of paragraphs.
Its all about bullet points... people who take a look at your resume want something that is easy to read and they want to be able to get a sense of your skills by a quick glance. Save the paragraphs for the interview!

 

[mAdMaLuDaWg]

Originally posted by: Rudee
Oh 73h noess!! A whole paragraph... where the hell are the cliffs.. this sucks
*clicks the X button*

FIXED!

 

[Rudee]

Originally posted by: mAdMaLuDaWg

Originally posted by: Rudee
Oh 73h noess!! A whole paragraph... where the hell are the cliffs.. this sucks
*clicks the X button*

FIXED!

Much closer to the truth, actually.

 

[Otaking]

1. Too wordy. Don't use lengthy sentences and paragraphs.

2. Need bullets, and for the love of god, make it easier to read!

3. Be more specific and elaborate on tasks. For example, "As a Customer Service Representative, I helped troubleshoot and solve problems that customers experienced with DirecTV systems." is too vague. You need to say what kind of problems and what you did to fix them. Make it impressive.

4. DON'T USE 1ST PERSON PRONOUNS! (I, me, my)

Do the things above, and it'll be 10x better.

 

[Landroval]

1. "de-flab" your writing. You can be more succint and informative.

2. triple-check grammar and spacing, e.g., "My duties as a Help Desk Technician was" "Canon,Okidata", missing commas between company names and locations.

3. A+ Certified is not an "Award". Actually none of the things you mention in awards are awards really.

4. Your "objectives" are not exactly oibjectives. Perhaps "summary"?

5. Under skills, you have a lot of seeming meaningless information. For example, who cares if you have experience with Microsoft Works? Adding every suite you have ever used diminishes the more imprtant information in that section.

 

Yech. Too much writing, not enough bullet points and good formatting. And what's with the blue font? Is that just my monitor?

EDIT: check my resume for tips.

 

[KeyserSoze]

Yeah, basically what everyone else is saying. Summarize, bold, bullets, etc.

 

[Leper Messiah]

I knew the blue font wasn't just me!

 

[FrequencyX]

Okay thanks guys, I will try to fix this garbage