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Critique my resume...

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cpals

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Please give me any pointers, tips, criticisms, etc... the job I'm looking for is either along the lines of computer repair or network admin type.

Also, one more thing.... I'm currently employed at a job that I pretty much hate and don't think they would be a good company for a reference. I've been there a little over four months... can I just leave that off my resume? I would probably tell my new employer I have to give a two-weeks notice, so that might be awkward though since I didn't list as currently being employed. Hm....

http://www.cpals.net/resume.pdf

Thanks!

Edit: Updated resume available! Please critique.
 
Originally posted by: jumpr
Originally posted by: bootymac
Here's mine. Keep in mind I'm still a teen 😛
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Where there's one bullet, there should be at least two. Never have a single bullet point.
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Under the Objective heading? What about the bullets in my Volunteer Experience?
 
Here is what I have:

Objective: something about using your education,experience, and skill to maximize your new employer profit or something like that

B.S. degree in CIS awarded in 2004.
Dean List on (specify the year, not just multiple).

On you present job, why you use past tense? and I don't think you need the *for a fair price*


 
Originally posted by: tfinch2
Might want to work on formatting and word choice a little bit more.

Edit: Visual Basic should be capitalized. It's not spelled realty
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What do you mean it's not spelled 'realty'?

So things I need to update:
Wording, capitalizations, past tense usage, get an objective....

Anything else?

Should I put on my current employer even if it's just a temp job that I don't even want?

Thanks.
 
Your objective is a run-on sentance that does nothing to grab the attention of the reader. It is "soft". Your resume is a chance to merket yourself the best way you can in the shortest amount of time. Try something like:

Objective - To increase productivity and profit of a computer-service company through utilization of first-hand experience mananging a computer repair comapny and formal education in Computer Informatio Systems.

...this gives the potential employer right off the bat of what you offer. It shows your committment to theur business, and shows them what tools you bring with you to accomplish those goals.

Education should come after Work Experience. Your degree, while important, is not as important as your applicable experience. Use past tense action words. Instead of "Run a computer repair business in order to meet the demands
of local businesses and home users.", change it to something like "Succesfully managed a full-service computer repair business to meet the demands of local business and home user clientele."

With regards to your skill set...you need to be much, much more specific. You mention familiarity with Linux...what kind? Installation? Troubleshooting? Networking (Samba, NFS, etc.) Be specific.

You've got a decent start, but you really need to go through this resume and shore it up before you start sending it out. Fix your formatting after you have the thing shored up. Avoid the topic headers vertically along the left margin...distracting and hard to read. Keep everything horizontal, bold the topic headers, left justify them. Your name and conatct info can be smaller and centered in the header of the document.

Keep working.
 
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