Critique my resume plz

[Kroze]

Career Objective
A postion within your organization that will utilize my recent education, experience, and unique abilities.

Education
Associate, Small Business Management
Sep. 2006

Camden County College, Blackwood, NJ.
- Working on getting my associate degree with the intention of transfering to a 4 year university.


H.S. Diploma, College Prep
Jun. 2002

Triton Regional High School, Runnemede, NJ.
- Honor roll student.
- Varsity wrestling team.


Employment History
Mechanic's Apprentice
Jan. 2004 to Jun. 2004

Tony's Auto Repair, Philadelphia, PA.

- Internship for a very high volume auto repair shop.
- Jobs ranging from oil change to replacing transmission on FWD & RWD vehicles.


Cashier
Oct. 2003 to Jan. 2004

Dunbar Armored Cash Vault, Cinnaminson, NJ.

- Process & verify all cash deposits.
- Ensures cash are not counterfeit.
- Operate proprietary computer system software for data entry.


Bulk Fuel Specialist
Jan. 2003 to Aug. 2003

United States Marine Corps, Kuwait & Iraq

- Provide combat service support to Marine division in support of Operation Iraqi Freedom.
- My experiences included engagement of enemy forces, security functions, and fuel mobilization for both tanks and helicopters


Military Background
United States Marine Corps
Jun. 2002 to Present

Wilmington, DE.

- Have security clearance
- Well trained in various firearms, stressful situations, and security watches.


Computer Skills

- Custom build computers.
- Microsoft Office: Word, Excel, Frontpage, and Access.
- All Windows Operating System.
- 60+ wpm.

 

[MaxDSP]

-objective should state at least what type of job you are looking for
-job history and computer skills needs to be more descriptive

 

[DaTT]

no bad.

 

[Kroze]

anything else?

 

[cruthick7]

Custom build computers is pretty vague. List specific hardware you have experience with.

 

[Kroze]

Originally posted by: cruthick7
Custom build computers is pretty vague. List specific hardware you have experience with.

hrm...

i don't know how to word it so i figured custom build pc is good...


is listing specific hardware a good idea?

should i start listing like mobo, hard drive, video cards, memory, cases, ps, etc...???

i just don't think the average employer will know or care what brand or parts of the pc.

 

[AMDZen]

- All Windows Operating System.

Should either be a) All windows operating System's (yes this does matter on a resume, some employer's may notice. Or better b) just list all windows systems like so:

- Windows 9x, NT, 2000, 2003, and XP Operating Systems

 

[agnitrate]

Is there any way you can post a PDF or screenshot of it or something? It would be nice to see it in the format you plan to present it in.

-silver

 

[Kroze]

Originally posted by: agnitrate
Is there any way you can post a PDF or screenshot of it or something? It would be nice to see it in the format you plan to present it in.

-silver

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