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Critique my resumé!

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ItTheCow

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Details: I'm 19 and looking to apply for an internship at a biotech/biopharmeceutical firm. I'm guessing the internship will be in R&D. I know I don't have the work experience they're looking for, but I'm hoping a recommendation letter will help.

Some concerns that I have already that many of my skill and work experience is mirrored. Should I try to mention everything just once, or is it ok as it is? Any comments are welcome.
 
c'est excellent tu est une personne qui avais des langues different mais je croix que ton nouveaux employeur seulement cherche pour des chose qui est appliciable pour ton emploi. Mettre plus de ton education, c'est le plus important information dans un résumé pour un co-op travaille.

Mandarin too? Wow, you'd do well in the foreign service.
 
Im sure you obviously have all your personal contact information at the top of the page...you just took it off for obvious privacy reasons....just checking tho

In the sams portion where u say you saved time , TRY to be quantative and say exactly how much time it saved....TRY to always be quantitative, they like numbers and exactly how well u did/improved something

Maybe talk about a particular project or problem you ahve worked on in ur physics of math class....especially pertinant in your major

AND THE OBVIOUS, talk about PUTER skills... come on, ur on anandtech, you SHOULD have superior computer skills than the average joe since u are on here..
 
Mes études universaires - C'est une bonne idée.

Too graphical - Ironically, I would say that most resumes are too bland. I was looking for something that would catch the readers' eye. Would something so flashy be inappropriate for a biotech company? And yes, I used a template.

Skills section - Most HR people spend less than 10 seconds on resumes, right? I figured I'd try to be concise, not fluff anything, and leave it for the interview. I should mention that the company is hosting an event at their facility, and an interview is already built in, so the resume won't serve as a ticket to an interview. However, most of what's in Skills is elaborated upon under Work Experience. Again, should I try to get rid of the duplicity? That would make room for more under Education.

Quantitative numbers - I'd be estimating numbers if I did that. Would that still be ok?

Physics problem/project - I'll have to think about something I could talk about, but it seems like this would be better suited during an interview and not a resume, no?
 
Originally posted by: ItTheCow
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Details: I'm 19 and looking to apply for an internship at a biotech/biopharmeceutical firm. I'm guessing the internship will be in R&D. I know I don't have the work experience they're looking for, but I'm hoping a recommendation letter will help.

Some concerns that I have already that many of my skill and work experience is mirrored. Should I try to mention everything just once, or is it ok as it is? Any comments are welcome.
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Unless you are brilliant, you will not get a job. Find someone who actually works there, then email them and hound them - that is your only chance. It's all about networking at your age.
 
go to internship fairs at your school and hope to nail something through contacts you meet there
 
Originally posted by: ItTheCow
Mes études universaires - C'est une bonne idée.

Too graphical - Ironically, I would say that most resumes are too bland. I was looking for something that would catch the readers' eye. Would something so flashy be inappropriate for a biotech company? And yes, I used a template.

Skills section - Most HR people spend less than 10 seconds on resumes, right? I figured I'd try to be concise, not fluff anything, and leave it for the interview. I should mention that the company is hosting an event at their facility, and an interview is already built in, so the resume won't serve as a ticket to an interview. However, most of what's in Skills is elaborated upon under Work Experience. Again, should I try to get rid of the duplicity? That would make room for more under Education.

Quantitative numbers - I'd be estimating numbers if I did that. Would that still be ok?

Physics problem/project - I'll have to think about something I could talk about, but it seems like this would be better suited during an interview and not a resume, no?
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If you go to CCO(at purdue) they will tell you NEVER to use a template. It conveys the wrong message to employers. On there you should have the classes you are taking that are relevent, and more specific skills to grab their attention
 
u might actually put your college stuff first, then your skills and work experience. may want to drop the highschool stuff too. too graphical too, looks like a design job you're going for? doesn't look formal enough for the industry u seek.
 
how about an objective as the very first thing. Then college info. Drop the high school stuff. From that point on MOST important to least important. Describe some projects you have worked on in school that would relate in some way to what you hope to be doing in your internship. That is much more relevant than your current job experience. Maybe something interesting you're studying in an upper division physics lab if you've gotten that far. Describe a project where you had to work in a group or team. Then put your current work experience.
 
A second draft has been made. Thanks for the comments so far; keep them coming. I hope to have a closer-to-final-draft availble for review tomorrow at my university's career center.

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As for the objective, I'll save them the 3 seconds of BS they'll have to read. As for the format, I'm trying to present myself as being professional yet dynamic. Good idea, bad idea?
 
Originally posted by: PurdueRy
Woohoo Purdue! It looks too graphical for my taste...

did you use a template?

Skills section way to general
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the headings are way too prominent ... almost distracting

Oh yeah the skill set is really vague ... you might wanna adapt it to whatever you're applying for.

- strong moral character
- takes leadership position as needed (jumped from passive too)
- analytical of work quality and results

None of that really means anything... put down something you actually know/can do rather just BS blurbs
 
Originally posted by: tfinch2
You put that you are brilliant? 😕
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You really shouldnt say that... Employers are looking for people that are humble more than cocky.

Im doing interviews right now...my resume got me quite a few. Johnson & Johnson, Ingersoll Rand, KPMG, IBM, PricewaterhouseCoopers, Ernst & Young, UPS, and Accenture... So far so good.

You need more course related skills too, sounds like alot of bullsh1t to me...
 
You're missing an obective. One sentence at the top that says "Objective: an internship at (insert company name) that meets my development goals and allows me to contribute to the company in a positive, team atmosphere" Or something.

I do not understand that personal profile section. I must be getting old.
 
personally, i'd drop the activities section. I don't think they care about that crap.

Also, be more specific about skills and such...

 
Yeah I know, bad idea. The people at my school's career center advised against any subjective descriptors. Expect another draft tonight.
 
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