Critic my resume

[Zombie]

known issues: there are issues with past tense and present tense that I need to fix but other than that feel free to chip in your 2 cents


first draft

 

[mugs]

Based on the topic title I'm anticipating spelling errors.

Maybe someone else has some insight into this, but I'm not sure that mentioning revenue figures is a great idea, especially since they're not particularly high.

 

[Deleted member 4644]

Something about the layout is a bit hard on my eyes.... and I don't know what all of your job stuff means, but other than that it looks ok based on a quick look.

 

[Deleted member 4644]

Oh, and keep tenses the same.. either DEVELOPED or DEVELOP, but don't switch unless you have a real reason IMO.

 

[tfinch2]

Oooo, generated 60k in revenue? Is that enough to keep the building powered for the year?

 

[Zombie]

yep, I will have that taken care of by tomorrow.

well 60k was for that quarter and as a startup that money meant a lot.

 

[Zombie]

^need more

 

[veggz]

Link dead.

 

[Skeeedunt]

Originally posted by: veggz
Link dead.

Very dead.

It's critique by the way.

 

[Nutdotnet]

Originally posted by: LordSegan
Oh, and keep tenses the same.. either DEVELOPED or DEVELOP, but don't switch unless you have a real reason IMO.

Link's dead but...

For CURRENT job use PRESENT tense. For past experience use PAST tense...hence, the reason one may see DEVELOP and DEVELOPED in the same resume.

 

[Zombie]

up....fixed the link.

 

[krunchykrome]

Well Gunjam, it looks good to me.

 

[yllus]

In my opinion, listing your career experience is 10x more important than listing which languages and tools you're proficient in. As a software developer, I will freely admit that any first-year college student can be taught in a month how to program if directly properly.

I'd list your education first - mostly because it doesn't take up much room and establishes your credentials before the recruiter's eyes move downwards to your work experience.

Next, change 'Career Track' to 'Professional Experience'. Career Track makes me think "these were steps along the way for me" - doesn't inspire the idea of loyalty the company will want you to have to it.

Don't self-rate how much money you made/saved the company. Makes you look full of yourself and is probably inaccurate.

For the languages/tools area, break out 'Windows, Solaris and Linux' into specifics. Which versions of Windows and Linux?

Consider dropping the 'Skills' area you have completely, or use it to present yourself as a well-rounded candidate who can contribute in the area of business knowledge as well as technical.

 

[Zombie]

Dollar ammount shows impact of my work. Remember my resume has to get past the HR first and HR/buisness people don't understand technology they go by keywords and dollar ammount.

Also as a professional my experience comes before my education.

 

[AmigaMan]

Originally posted by: yllus
In my opinion, listing your career experience is 10x more important than listing which languages and tools you're proficient in. As a software developer, I will freely admit that any first-year college student can be taught in a month how to program if directly properly.

I'd list your education first - mostly because it doesn't take up much room and establishes your credentials before the recruiter's eyes move downwards to your work experience.

Next, change 'Career Track' to 'Professional Experience'. Career Track makes me think "these were steps along the way for me" - doesn't inspire the idea of loyalty the company will want you to have to it.

Don't self-rate how much money you made/saved the company. Makes you look full of yourself and is probably inaccurate.

For the languages/tools area, break out 'Windows, Solaris and Linux' into specifics. Which versions of Windows and Linux?

Consider dropping the 'Skills' area you have completely, or use it to present yourself as a well-rounded candidate who can contribute in the area of business knowledge as well as technical.

Everything you have mentioned I would and have done the opposite of. You really have no clue do you? Not mentioning how much money you've saved your company? That's not important? I agree if it's not accurate, but that information is easy to find out.
Who the fsck cares what specific version of Windows you've used if you're a software developer? Dropping the skills part? Are you insane? That shows the recruiter/hiring manager what you know that can't be listed in your experience section. Education is probably the least important thing on your resume. Unless you're FRESH out of college, recruiters/hiring managers are only thinking, "sure we get that you graduated SuperDuper College, now tell me what you've done."
So you can teach any first year student to program if "directly properly"? I'll assume that your mangled sentence means anyone can learn to program if they have the proper direction. You really ought to tell the "For Dummies" book writers, they'd be interested.

 

[Zombie]

I agree transferable skills section is very important and there is no way am I gonna drop it.
Dollar ammount is pretty close to original ammount. 60k doesn't sound much but it is a lot when it is the very first release of the product and you are involved from scratch.

any more comments?

 

[dullard]

I think it needs a lot of work. I tried reading your Career Track three times and still was unsure of what you did. It is just visibily a blur of text. Can you break up those bullets into more/smaller bullets and be less wordy?

[*]Operating Systems should be underlined to match Languages and IDEs. Also, it should be in the same capital letter font.
[*]Why isn't project leader for Product_A under a bullet? All of the rest of your jobs are bulleted. Maybe put the reponsibilities for Product_A as a subbullet like you had subbullets for Special projects. Anything to make this area less cluttered will help.
[*]Put user interface, file parsing, etc. for Product_C in a subbullet again to make it less cluttered.
[*]I personally like the cash numbers if they are explained. $60k for a startup is massive, $60k for a large company is pathetic. Was that amount massive or pathetic? Your resume doesn't make it clear.
[*]Again to remove clutter, can you drop the city locations for Alcita Technologies and Applied Micro Circuits? You didn't put it in this section for U Mass, so be consistant.
[*]Make things less wordy. For example, use "quarterly revenue" instead of "revenue for that quarter". Apply this throughout your resume.
[*]I realize that it is a visual flaw from a work in progress, but the double line above skills is annoying. Make certain the top line makes it on the first page.
[*]Can you reorder things in logical order within your topics? For example, under skills you talk about team envirement, then switch topics, and then later come back with team collaboration. Either that is redundant or it is out of order.
[*]Do you have anything interesting from your education to list? Any academic awards, any good GPA, etc? As it is, that one line just looks pathetic compared to the rest of your wordy resume.
[*]On two page resumes, shouldn't you at least put your name on page 2 in case they get separated?
[*]Would you consider justifying the font? A jagged right edge looks unprofessional. Sometimes the massive spaces that justifying creates is worse, but not usually.
[*]Visually, I don't like the bullets in Skills being different from the bullets in Carrer Track, but whatever floats your boat.

 

[Zombie]

name is there as part of the header, just removed from the web version

 

[Sentinel]

Make it one page, education first, then professional experience and then training.

 

[dullard]

Originally posted by: Sentinel
Make it one page, education first, then professional experience and then training.

There is no need for a one page resume. When you have lots of experience and minimal education, never put education first. The training part I could see an argument to move, but it is ok up at the top.

 

[j00fek]

school taught me that 2pg is too much, condense it

 

[dullard]

Originally posted by: j00fek
school taught me that 2pg is too much, condense it

That is true when you are just out of school. Anything more than a one page resume when all you have done is take a few classes is just BS padding. So of course, you should keep the BS fluff down to one page. Once you have lots of experience, there is nothing at all wrong with two pages.

That said, I agree this resume is too wordy and can be somewhat condensed.

 

[dug777]

*critique*

 

[Sentinel]

It seems out of order for me is why I mentioned he might try re-ordering it. Perhaps it is just the structure of the professional experience section that makes it seem that way.

 

[dug777]

Don't be at all worried about going over a page.

The'll be more impressed with all your work experience than the bare minimum you can squeeze on one page