Cover letter Help! **Constructive Help please**

tm37

Lifer
Jan 24, 2001
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Give me some reviews of this cover letter I wrote and let me know what you think:)

THanks!

I am Writing in response to your Job posting on your website for System Field Representative. After reviewing the job requirements and responsibilities I feel I am very suited for this position. My background includes over three years of field service on medical equipment and over six years total as an electronics technician. I understand and utilize the principles associated with achieving customer satisfaction with ever job I undertake, while striving to exceed customer expectations.

I always have sought to achieve the highest level of professionalism and have a strong desire to represent both my employer and myself in the most positive light. The customer needs to feel confidant that the work being performed will be performed correctly and promptly. I stand behind every job I undertake and never try to make excuses for any failures I may encounter. When faced with adversity I take great pride in finding and fixing any problems that have arisen.

I believe my background in both customer service and electronics makes me a strong candidate for this position. I am always seeking to grow and hope that XXXXXXXXX can provide me with an opportunity for professional growth and job satisfaction while allowing me to be productive to the company bottom line. Thank you for your time and consideration.
 

sohcrates

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Sep 19, 2000
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i think that letter is quite good. you want to make sure that you show the employer what THEY will get out of you...i.e. saying "i want this job so i can improve myself" is bad...you want to say something like "i want to improve myself and therefore improve the company" or what not. and i think you do that pretty well.

 

tm37

Lifer
Jan 24, 2001
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<< i think that letter is quite good. you want to make sure that you show the employer what THEY will get out of you...i.e. saying "i want this job so i can improve myself" is bad...you want to say something like "i want to improve myself and therefore improve the company" or what not. and i think you do that pretty well. >>



I truely hate doing these things because I feel like all I am doing is talking about me!:Q But they are required I think so Hopefully this will help me get a foot in the door!