Chapt. III

HappyPuppy

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Yep, we arrived at Alpha 3 dodging sniper fire, mortars and RPG's. The team we relieved headed out with mortars chasing them.

Inside the bunker we had to set up quickly. There were six cots over which we had to hang mosquito nets, duffel bags had to be unpacked and everything hung on nails, foodstuff had to be inventoried and accounted for and..........someone had to head out to the tower.

We cut for low card and I lost. I pulled on my flack jacket, put my steel pot on my head, slung a bandolier of loaded magazines over my shoulder, picked up my rifle and headed for the door. I paused, wondering if I would see the world from the top of that tower.

It was only 30 yards, an easy run. When I hit the bottom of the tower I still had 35 feet to go, though, straight up. I climbed as fast as I could to gain the safety of the sandbags at the top. The rungs of that ladder, hammered in by the French 15 or more years in the past held and I threw myself on the floor.

Alpha 3 was a firebase built by the French during the French-Indo China War. It was situated less than 100 yards south of the DMZ, surrounded by a minefield and concertina wire and had two ways in and out. To the South there was a 10 foot wide road through the mines. To the North was another path, again about 10 wide through the mines and lined with Claymores.

On the deck of the tower were a periscope binocular, meant for daylight observation without exposing yourself, and a Starlight scope for nighthttime observation. There was also a standard issue Military two way radio and a dozen grenades piled in one corner.

I stood up and looked around. To the North, at about 150 yards the jungle started with a ridgeline rising up another 500 yards behind that. To the West, South and East there was defoliated desolation for approximatelly 500 yards. Beyone that was the standard jungle vegetation and a couple of villages.

Within our compound, inside the mines and wire, an area the size of two football fields, were three bunkers, two towers, one blown up and burnt to a crisp, and .......nothing else. Just dirt.

Most disconcerting was the fact that the six of us were the only people there. WTF? If I'm going to be standing in a 35 foot high tower 100 yards south of the DMZ in 1968 I would really like to see at least a couple of hundred infantrymen manning the perimeter. Holy fvcking SH!T! There was nobody, just the six of us.

"Hello, Mom? I have some good news and some bad news. The good news is that I am alive and well. The bad news is that our position could be overrun in 5 minutes and I will be a crispy critter. Been nice talking to you, Mom. Bye."

 

AreaCode707

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As a lit agent, my advice would be to cut down on the detail (too easy to skim and not soak in).

As a member of ATOT, my advice would be STOP POSTING, at least for tonight.

[Edit] BTW, the decent spelling and punctuation, plus adequate spacing, is appreciated. :)
 

HappyPuppy

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Chapt. III, like Chapts. II and I are not meant to be literary accomplishments. They are meant to convey the truth.

If you can't appreciate what I am trying to do then the least you can do is refrain from commenting. Thank you.
 

Ryan

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Originally posted by: HappyPuppy
Chapt. III, like Chapts. II and I are not meant to be literary accomplishments. They are meant to convey the truth. If you can't appreciate what I am trying to do then the least you can do is refrain from commenting. Thank you.

Dude, good writing style is not your thing - it's atroceous (sp?).
 

AreaCode707

Lifer
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Originally posted by: HappyPuppy
Chapt. III, like Chapts. II and I are not meant to be literary accomplishments. They are meant to convey the truth.

If you can't appreciate what I am trying to do then the least you can do is refrain from commenting. Thank you.

Truth about what? They convey nothing if they're too detailed for people to easily follow; people will cease reading, and have responses like "wtf" and "crapola". I have no lack of appreciation for what you're trying to do (though I can't tell what you ARE trying to do), just commenting on things you might find helpful.

:p
 

Pepsi90919

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Originally posted by: HappyPuppy
Chapt. III, like Chapts. II and I are not meant to be literary accomplishments. They are meant to convey the truth.

If you can't appreciate what I am trying to do then the least you can do is refrain from commenting. Thank you.

no buddy, the idea of a public forum is so that we can 0wn your ass should you post something that SUx0RZ
 

Colt45

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great stuff happypuppy. the naysayers can stfu.

i dont even support the US govn't (at least in its current state) but I have respect for what you have done.

the younger generation needs to realize what you and your fellow servicemen have done for them
 

AreaCode707

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Originally posted by: Colt45
great stuff happypuppy. the naysayers can stfu.

i dont even support the US govn't (at least in its current state) but I have respect for what you have done.

the younger generation needs to realize what you and your fellow servicemen have done for them

Hel-lo? I'm not dissing him, nor disrespecting. Merely noting that his style makes it difficult for people to appreciate even what his subject matter is, much less his point. Look at the replies - they prove my point!
 

HappyPuppy

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Originally posted by: Colt45
great stuff happypuppy. the naysayers can stfu.

i dont even support the US govn't (at least in its current state) but I have respect for what you have done.

the younger generation needs to realize what you and your fellow servicemen have done for them



Thanks, Colt45. You are proof that I am getting my point across..

Maybe it's a generational thing, who knows.

For those of you who appreciate my story, I thank you. For those of you who don't, perhaps you should re-study your history.
 

Ryan

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Originally posted by: HappyPuppy
Originally posted by: Colt45 great stuff happypuppy. the naysayers can stfu. i dont even support the US govn't (at least in its current state) but I have respect for what you have done. the younger generation needs to realize what you and your fellow servicemen have done for them
Thanks, Colt45. You are proof that I am getting my point across.. Maybe it's a generational thing, who knows. For those of you who appreciate my story, I thank you. For those of you who don't, perhaps you should re-study your history.

I suggest creative writing, for you at least.
 

Scouzer

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What the hell is with this negative backlash!? I very much enjoy reading these writings...I couldn't care less if the grammer was perfect, its quite legible

None of us have great grammer around here...
 

Ryan

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Originally posted by: Scouzer
What the hell is with this negative backlash!? I very much enjoy reading these writings...I couldn't care less if the grammer was perfect, its quite legible None of us have great grammer around here...

I could care less about grammar, but his style of writing is about as interesting as reading an FBI Technical Report.
 

Phuz

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Why were you guys left out there alone, only 6 people, in such a hot area?
 

Scouzer

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Originally posted by: rbloedow
Originally posted by: Scouzer
What the hell is with this negative backlash!? I very much enjoy reading these writings...I couldn't care less if the grammer was perfect, its quite legible None of us have great grammer around here...

I could care less about gramm<STRONG>a</STRONG>r, but his style of writing is about as interesting as reading an FBI Technical Report.

I feel it suits the type of writing it is. A bleak, pessimistic piece of writing alongside a bleak situation.
 

Goosemaster

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Originally posted by: BigPoppa
*radio chatter* whiskey tango foxtrot *radio chatter*

roger

EDIT: THere is nothing wrong with the writing's etc, just explain yourself....most likely this is your own account..just say that.

Reality is not literature, and should not be judged as such my friend. Make sure to clear that up.