One thing I recommend is looking at other types of contracts. For example, other types of rental contracts or even sales contracts. What you're trying to do is get a feel for the general syntax used in contracts. The syntax is not used to make it difficult to read but is actually used to make it as clear as possible what the contract entails from a legal standpoint.
My advice is to get someone else (preferably at least two others with business/law backgrounds) to proofread it to make sure there are no glaring errors. Especially since she is modifying it for personal use.
Also, do a Google search for "photography contract" and read over the various contract examples. I am going to assume she is going to do this on a professional basis even if it's part time in nature. It pays to do your homework and protect yourself as much as possible. Spending a few days on the internet and reading over contract examples is better than getting sued and losing if there is a contract dispute.
