applying for a job... how does this sound?

[thirtythree]

To whom it may concern,

I noticed your ad for a math tutor in the Davis County Clipper, and am interested in applying. Though I don't have one year of college work, I'll be finishing up high school this June and have already been accepted to the University of Utah. I have also taken both AP Statistics and AP Calculus; I scored 33 on the mathematics portion of the ACT and 770 on the mathematics portion of the SAT. If you think I may be qualified, please take a look at my attached résumé. I have also included the content of the résumé below in case you do not have Microsoft Word. Thanks for your time.

Sincerely,
Devin Donaldson

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in response to:
Patient, caring knowlegeable math tutor needed for Bntfl center. 20-25 hrs/wk, $10/hr, min 1 yr college work req'd. E-mail resume to ******** @ aol,com or fax to ***-****.

 

[Ninjja]

Of course you should apply....you look more than smart enough to do it, but you lose nothing at giving it a try. good luck!

 

[thirtythree]

Originally posted by: Ninjja
Of course you should apply....you look more than smart enough to do it, but you lose nothing at giving it a try. good luck!

guess it's settled then. does the paragraph sound okay? I've never really applied for anything other than fast food and manual labor (and not with a resume in those cases).

 

[gordiflan]

Definitely doesn't hurt to apply. Good luck.

 

[gistech1978]

alls they can say is no.
or not even call you back, go ahead and try. it doesnt hurt anything.

 

[drum]

don't address it "to whom it may concern", try to call and get a name that you can address if possible

 

[thirtythree]

Originally posted by: drum
don't address it "to whom it may concern", try to call and get a name that you can address if possible

there's no phone number.

 

[Bleep]

If you think I may be qualified, please take a look at my attached résumé.

I would change this statement. Something like "Although I do not meet the advertised minimum educational requirements for the position my knowledge in this area is excellent and I feel that I could easly fullfill the needs of the persons needing tutoring."

Bleep

 

[CPA]

Change the last sentence to:

Thank you for your time and consideration.

or just:

Thank you for your time.


Thanks is slang.

 

[EagleKeeper]

Get rid of the reference to MS Word.

By implying that they might not have it, you could be creating a superior attitude.

Anyone that will be receivign the resume/letter will have the ability to open the attachment and/or be able to get it done.

 

[cchen]

You sure you wanna do it? 10/hr is very little for private tutoring
around here people pay upwards of 20/hr

 

[DrVos]

Do your best to replace "To whom it may concern" with the name of the person in charge of hiring. There are alot of people in hiring positions that toss your resume for little things like that. To them, if you don't bother to find our their name, they aren't gonna bother reading your resume. It's a stupid reason to skip on a job candiate- but in this job market, i guess they have plenty to chose from.

 

[thirtythree]

thanks for the suggestions. I sent the e-mail but got a delivery error... guess I'll have to find a fax machine.