Any english majors about wanna read my paper?

[fyleow]

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[dejitaru]

yeah

 

[Jzero]

You need to include a cool nickname.

Like "The Yellow Dart."

 

[VBboy]

Originally posted by: fyleow
Wrote a paper about violence in Richard's life in Black Boy. Any english majors want to help me improve my essay writing skills? I've already submitted the paper so it's not like you're doing my homework but I would like some input as to why I am such a crappy writer.

Well, judging by the writing style you used in your post... 🙂 Here is how I would have put it:

"I wrote a paper on violence in Richard's life in "Black Boy". Would any English majors like to help me to improve my essay writing skills? I have already submitted the paper, so you would not be "doing my homework" for me. I just want to get some input as to why my style is not as good as that of other writers."

😀

Just pulling your nads, kid.

 

[Supermercado]

Originally posted by: Jzero
You need to include a cool nickname.

Like "The Yellow Dart."

ROFL

 

[fyleow]

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[NorthRiver]

I'll read it. Email it to me.

 

[fyleow]

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[NorthRiver]

What is the paper for, and what is it supposed to be about?

 

[NorthRiver]

Ok I will give it a go.

You have alot of punctuation missing.
Run on sentences.
Story does not flow.
Do you have to have the page references in there?
Are you telling his story, or is it a book report?


In reading the paper I can see that Richard is a troubled child, but it is a hard read. I have to force myself to digest it. I would write it first person thru Richards eyes. If you had set guidlines for the paper I would stay in those boundries, but put your own little spin on it. Your paper is to cookie cutter. Professors want things to stand out. They are grading you on if you can get their attention or not. You are writing an average paper. I want to see some emotion, thought process, not some line out of a book. How did the book make you feel at that moment? Were you sad, did it relate to you in anyway? When you write, you need to convey those things.

 

[fyleow]

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