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Am i correcting this sentense right?

Kroze

Kroze

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I have seen couples who have been together for a long time, fight each other and bring up past grievances that have occurred a long time ago.



Is there anything wrong with the sentence above? I think there are....so here's my correction. DO you think it's right?

I had seen couples who had been together for a long time, fought each other and bring up past grievances that had occured a long time ago.
 
just change the last have to had and your done

edit: just to clarify i mean take the original sentence not your supposed correct one and change the last have to had.
 
Originally posted by: Kroze
I have seen couples who have been together for a long time, fight each other and bring up past grievances that have occurred a long time ago.



Is there anything wrong with the sentence above? I think there are....so here's my correction. DO you think it's right?

I had seen couples who had been together for a long time, fought each other and bring up past grievances that had occured a long time ago.
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There is one problem with that sentence and your correction sucks.
 
Originally posted by: gigapet
just change the last have to had and your done

edit: just to clarify i mean take the original sentence not your supposed correct one and change the last have to had.
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That is an incorrect statement.
 
Such superfluity, imo. I'd reduce it to the following:

I have witnessed couples that fought over grievances long in their past.

Your sentence is just awkward, corrected or not.
 
Originally posted by: gigapet
just change the last have to had and your done

edit: just to clarify i mean take the original sentence not your supposed correct one and change the last have to had.
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I'm not so sure you should be correcting sentences :beer:😉
 
Originally posted by: Descartes
Such superfluity, imo. I'd reduce it to the following:

I have witnessed couples that fought over grievances long in their past.

Your sentence is just awkward, corrected or not.
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It's hard to correct it without seeing the argument he's trying to express.

I'd guess it'd be more like:

I have seen couples who have been together for a long time, yet fight and bring up grievances that have occurred a long time ago.
 
Originally posted by: Beau
I can accurately guess "no" solely on the grammar of your thread title 😛
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The use of "right" instead of a more appropriate "correct" was a tip, but people still use it all the time.

"Is this right?" That annoys me.
 
Originally posted by: Beau
Originally posted by: Descartes
Such superfluity, imo. I'd reduce it to the following:

I have witnessed couples that fought over grievances long in their past.

Your sentence is just awkward, corrected or not.
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It's hard to correct it without seeing the argument he's trying to express.

I'd guess it'd be more like:

I have seen couples who have been together for a long time, yet fight and bring up grievances that have occurred a long time ago.
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I know, but he didn't provide that information in his post. I was just giving an example of how I might reduce it.

The comma in the above sentence just doesn't feel/read/seem right, but I can't articulate why. I think the word yet should be used as follows:

For whatever reason, I can't articulate why I disagree with your sentence; yet, it might very well be accurate.
 
Originally posted by: Descartes

The comma in the above sentence just doesn't feel/read/seem right, but I can't articulate why. I think the word yet should be used as follows:

For whatever reason, I can't articulate why I disagree with your sentence; yet, it might very well be accurate.
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The comma is one of the incorrect things about the sentence. It is redundant to say "past grievances that have occurred a long time ago". Remove "past" to eleminate redundancy.
 
Originally posted by: Descartes
Originally posted by: gigapet
just change the last have to had and your done

edit: just to clarify i mean take the original sentence not your supposed correct one and change the last have to had.
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I'm not so sure you should be correcting sentences :beer:😉
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yeah your probably righter about that
 
Originally posted by: Descartes
Such superfluity, imo. I'd reduce it to the following:

I have witnessed couples that fought over grievances long in their past.

Your sentence is just awkward, corrected or not.
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:thumbsup:
 
Hrm. There's a lot that could be done to that sentence. Oh, it's more or less grammatically allowable, but it's very clunky. You should completely re-write it to be more streamlined. Find a better way to say what you want to express.

And that comma... that comma should not be there. Please, please take it out. That's the only thing definitely wrong with your sentence.
 
alrighty i'm freaking lost


Although we can clearly see rationalization as a defense mechanism, displacement may not seem like a defense mechanism at all.



in that sentence, should i change the word "seem" to something else? Because the first part before the comma, it's in the present tense. and now after the comma, it's in the past tense. it's so confusing to me.

🙁
 
Originally posted by: Kroze
alrighty i'm freaking lost


Although we can clearly see rationalization as a defense mechanism, displacement may not seem like a defense mechanism at all.



in that sentence, should i change the word "seem" to something else? Because the first part before the comma, it's in the present tense. and now after the comma, it's in the past tense. it's so confusing to me.

🙁
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You really need to do your own homework instead of asking a forum to do it for you.
 
Originally posted by: KrozeAm i correcting this sentense right?
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I didn't even have to open the thread to know the answer was no friggin way...

p.s. do your own damn homework...

 
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