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A poem my baby sister wrote

imported_Tomato

Diamond Member
Well... she's not a baby anymore, but she's in her first year of middle school. Reading the poem she wrote made me sad.


Anne Sue

Little Anne Sue, was never too poor, she had dresses made of diamonds,
and her glasses were made of gold

She tried to make friends, but they just wanted her stuff,
they complimented and giggled, but she had had enough

"Why don't you like me, just for who I am?
Do you have to just like me, just for just what I have?
Why aren't you true, for all that I do,
for CRYING OUT LOUD, why can't you be you?"

She cried and she wailed, and each tear that fell, a diamond disappeared,
and with that they could tell-

She was no longer rich. She was as poor as a mouse.
Her gold disappeared, and so did her house.

With disgust in their faces, they left her alone,
"We no longer like you, because you have no more gold."

She looked at the ground, she looked at the sky,
a rainbow appeared, and she started to cry

Little Anne Sue, was finally free,
she has true friends now, because now she's with me.


She told me that she wrote the poem for herself, and that she is Anne Sue. Things haven't been going too well financially family-wise, and some of her old middle school friends won't talk to her because she's "not rich anymore." She just told me "It's mostly true except for the last part, I made the part about having true friends up. I don't have good friends yet, but I'm going to keep trying." Kids can be mean. 🙁

Peace,
Dezign
 
Dezign

I feel for you and your sister. I have a 9th grader, a 4th grader, and a little 3 year old munchkin and I know how hard it is to watch them go through the pain of 'life initiation'. I also have a niece and nephew and neither one of them is doing too well, so I am doing everything I can to stay connected to them.

Some really good books include Reviving Ophelia (it focuses on how girls are mostly valued for superficial reasons and how it hurts them emotionally) and also one called A Tribe Apart that might be helpful. It helps to understand the dynamics of society we are living in... you can try to protect your sister, but when she walks out that door and into school, there isn't much you can do besides just be there for her when she gets home.
 
I think that would make an AWESOME children's book...especially with a decent illustrator.

Very vivid imagery. Very nice!

BTW: The thumbs-up is for the poem's merits...not its subject matter...which is something that can be very traumatic for children, particularly girls.
BTW2: As a father, the kind of crap girls go through with their peer groups is something I dread for my daughters.
BTW3: MTG had some HORRIBLE experiences in middle school...so she can relate 🙁
 
Wow, thanks for the positive feedback on the poem, I appreciate the kind reviews and I'll be sure to pass them along to her. 🙂

So glad to have you back, Isla... I'll check out those books this weekend. I've been looking for new recommendations, and I've heard excellent things about "Reviving Ophelia." Kids really can be cruel, and their confidence/self-esteem is so sensitive at that age... I'm trying my best to be the big sister I can, which is difficult from a state across the country.

What an interesting idea, Tallgeese! I wonder how that works... I may look into it tomorrow (been curious about the whole children's book process for awhile now) during work.

Until then... I'm going home to get some rest. Good night!

Peace,
Dezign

 
hehe.. i hate poetry... i dunno.. i guess if im going to imagine something, its gonna be on my own terms. not a poet
 
Originally posted by: Jugernot
Hmmm, it doesn't rhyme in parts.... but overall good. 😀

Right, and this determines good poetry.
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Deszign, middle school is hell. She'll pull through.
 
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